ok so theres a couple of things wrong with this.
btw im just saying this to help you improve and to be a better artist, im not trying to start a internet flame war or anything.
1. your buildup on the intro was too generic. i mean like, volume buildup?
the claps really annoying too, you introduce it way too soon. I would try to change that buildup by introducing stuff 1by 1, example, pad cutoff intro, piano intro cutoff, lead intro, add in some hats w/ bass, and then do a 1-2bar pause and then let it all jump out, add in a clap after 1 repetition after the pause.
2. your breakdown transition was good, but after that it kinda died. it wasnt really a breakdown, just a more mellow version of the melody. at your breakdown you need to make a piano, pad, bells, something calm.
3. master, and eq your hats + leads more pls
for 2 months, this is pretty good though.
im giving you a 5 and an 8,
4.07 / 5.00 (+ 0.075)
good advice, ill try it, thanks! =]
turned out pretty awesome :)
good job :P
4.55 / 5.00 (+ 0.55)
sounds really 8 bit :P
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